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You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do.

Dear Mr Scheer, I am writing this letter to express my deep disappointment with the news that the work placement programme has been cancelled this summer. One of the main reasons I chose to study Business English at your school in July and August was the chance to participate in the work placement programme. There are many English schools in California that offer Business English, but not many who offer the chance to go and work in a local company as part of the course programme. Your school is more expensive than the competition, but I was happy to pay extra because I thought the course programme was better quality. Now however, I am very unhappy because I have spent a lot of money and I am not getting the course I want. As the course programme is now very different to the one advertised, I would like to request a full refund of the money I have paid for this course. I will try to contact other schools in California, or maybe New York, which run Business English courses and can guarantee a work placement as part of the course. I look forward to receiving your reply. Yours Sincerely, James charles
Dear Mr
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Scheer
,

I am writing this letter to express my deep disappointment with the news that the
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work
placement
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programme
has
been cancelled
this summer.

One of the main reasons I chose to study Business English at your
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school
in July and August was the chance to participate in the
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work
placement
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programme
. There are
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many
English
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schools
in California that offer Business English,
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but
not
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many
who offer the chance to go and
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work
in a local
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company
as part of the
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course
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programme
. Your
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school
is more expensive than the competition,
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but
I was happy to pay extra
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because
I
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thought
the
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course
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programme
was better quality.
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Now
however
, I am
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very
unhappy
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because
I have spent
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a lot of
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money and
I am not getting the
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course
I want.

As the
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course
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programme
is
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now
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very
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different
to the one advertised, I would like to request a full refund of the money I have paid for this
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course
. I will try to contact other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
in California, or maybe New York, which run Business English
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
and can guarantee a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
placement as part of the course.

I look forward to receiving your reply.

Yours
Sincerely
,

James
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charles
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IELTS letter You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do.

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