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Your work place does not have a parking area and it is causing some problems. Write a letter to your manager, Describe the problems it has caused. Explain what benefits a parking area would bring to the company. Suggest a solution.

Your work place does not have a parking area and it is causing some problems. Write a letter to your manager, Describe the problems it has caused. Explain what benefits a parking area would bring to the company. Suggest a solution. e5AMA
Dear Mr Ahmed, I hope this letter finds you well. I am Mohamed Hussein who works in the marketing department. I am writing with regard to the lack of parking lots for employees as well as clients. To begin with, due to difficulty in finding a proper place to park our vehicles, many of us have to commute using public transport instead. Thus, we usually arrive late because of repetitive drop-off stations in those early hours. Additionally, many clients contact via email or telephone calls informing us that they could not attend as for this problem. In fact, having spacious parking areas for the workforce and customers has become a necessity. This is because these areas would not only save employees’ time but also provide with clients an opportunity for face-to-face communication. This will definitely boost our productivity and sales. In order to have those parking lots, we can use the ground floor by relocating the financial department on the fifth floor. Alternatively, we can request sharing next multi-storey garage with the council. Both of them are an effective solution. Your prompt response is greatly appreciated. Yours faithfully, Mohamed Hussein
Dear Mr Ahmed,

I hope this letter finds you well. I
am Mohamed
Hussein who works in the marketing department.
I
am writing with regard to the lack of parking lots for employees
as well
as clients.

To
begin
with, due to difficulty in finding a proper place to park our vehicles,
many
of us
have to
commute using public transport
instead
.
Thus
, we
usually
arrive late
because
of repetitive drop-off stations in those early hours.
Additionally
,
many
clients contact via email or telephone calls informing us that they could not attend as for this problem.

In fact, having spacious parking areas for the workforce and customers has become a necessity. This is
because
these areas would not
only
save employees’ time
but
also
provide with clients an opportunity for face-to-face communication. This will definitely boost our productivity and sales.

In order to have those parking lots, we can
use
the
ground floor
by relocating the financial department on the fifth floor.
Alternatively
, we can request sharing
next
multi-storey
garage with the council. Both of them are an effective solution.

Your prompt response is
greatly
appreciated.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mohamed Hussein
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IELTS letter Your work place does not have a parking area and it is causing some problems. Write a letter to your manager, Describe the problems it has caused. Explain what benefits a parking area would bring to the company. Suggest a solution.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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