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Your manager is surveying your opinion about a scent-free workplace where perfumes and strong smells are not allowed. Many other workplaces in the city already have this policy. The workplace should have a scent-free policy.

Your manager is surveying your opinion about a scent-free workplace where perfumes and strong smells are not allowed. Many other workplaces in the city already have this policy. The workplace should have a scent-free policy. ePoV
Hello Phil, I have recently become aware that our workplace is considering adopting a scent-free environment policy. I strongly support this policy change. I believe that the other businesses in this city who have already adopted this policy are setting the standard for how the workplace environment should be. I am of the opinion that people should be free to do whatever they wish so long as their actions do not harm others. There are various groups of people who are extremely sensitive to strong scents and can often suffer from serious health issues after exposure. For some people, strong scents like perfumes or colognes can trigger severe migraine headaches and can sometimes induce temporary blindness. For others, strong smells can trigger respiratory distresses like an asthmatic attack. By allowing workers to wear strong scents in the workplace, the company would be promoting an environment that compromises the health and safety of workers who are susceptible to these smells. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to voice my opinion on this matter. Best regards, Leyla
Hello Phil,

I have recently become aware that our workplace is considering adopting a scent-free environment policy. I
strongly
support this policy
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change
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
believe that the other businesses in this city who have already adopted this policy are setting the standard for how the workplace environment should be.

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I
am of the opinion that
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people
should be free to do whatever they wish
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so
long as their actions do not harm others. There are various groups of
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people
who are
extremely
sensitive to
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strong
scents and can
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often
suffer from serious health issues after exposure. For
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some
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people
,
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strong
scents like perfumes or colognes can trigger severe migraine headaches and can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
induce temporary blindness. For others,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
strong
smells can trigger respiratory distresses like an asthmatic attack. By allowing workers to wear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
strong
scents in the workplace, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
would be promoting an environment that compromises the health and safety of workers who are susceptible to these smells.

Thank you for giving me the opportunity to voice my opinion on this matter.

Best regards,

Leyla
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IELTS letter Your manager is surveying your opinion about a scent-free workplace where perfumes and strong smells are not allowed. Many other workplaces in the city already have this policy. The workplace should have a scent-free policy.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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