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Your manager intend to closethe company 's cafetería. Write letter to him. Why doesn' t it work well? Give him the main lacks in the service. What do you suggest to keep it open

Your manager intend to closethe company 's cafetería. Write letter to him. Why doesn' t it work well? Give him the main lacks in the service. What do you suggest to keep it open B18a
Dear sir, My name is Selma Kaci and I am writing to express my concern about the closing of the cafeteria within the company premises. I am firmly convinced that this space's dysfunction is a result of its mismanagement which makes the staff quite dissatisfied. I would like to point out that such failed service towards the campany 's staff drove them to abandon the cafeteria which was always crowded over the three past years. It was a place where the employees could hang out after hard working hours. Currently, it appears deserted because of the poor service and food quality. So, the service is only ensured by a handful of workers recently hired with a blatant lack of training and experience. Additionally, it is so slow because of the insufficiency of microwave ovens to heat the ordered meals. Only one is functional while the three others are failed. Moreover, the quality of the ingredients you provide is below healthy standards. Thus, the staff seems Abviously reluctant to take their tiffin there and prefer bringing their own dishes and taking them at their desks despite the uncomfort. For that, as I haunt the cafeteria frequently, I find it beneficial for a great part of the staff. I request you to keep it open and make some changes by hiring new skilled cookers and waiters. It would be also necessary to repair the inoperative microwave ovens in order to serve heat ordered dishes. Furthermore, I will appreciate if you can allocate a more considerable budget for serving good food to your employees. I believe that such initiative can strengthen their motivation and dedication for work. Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to seeing positive feedback. Yours faithfully. Selma Kaci.
Dear sir, My name is Selma
Kaci and
I am writing to express my concern about the closing of the cafeteria within the
company
premises. I am
firmly
convinced that this space's dysfunction is a result of its mismanagement which
makes
the
staff
quite dissatisfied.

I would like to point out that such failed service towards the
campany
's
staff
drove them to abandon the cafeteria which was always crowded over the three past years. It was a place where the employees could hang out after
hard working
hours.
Currently
, it appears deserted
because
of the poor service and food quality.
So
, the service is
only
ensured by a handful of workers recently hired with a blatant lack of training and experience.
Additionally
, it is
so
slow
because
of the insufficiency of microwave ovens to heat the ordered meals.
Only
one is functional while the three others
are failed
.
Moreover
, the quality of the ingredients you provide is below healthy standards.
Thus
, the
staff
seems
Abviously
reluctant to take their
tiffin
there and prefer bringing their
own
dishes and taking them at their desks despite the
uncomfort
.

For that, as I haunt the cafeteria
frequently
, I find it beneficial for a great part of the
staff
. I request you to
keep
it open and
make
some
changes
by hiring new skilled cookers and waiters. It would be
also
necessary to repair the inoperative microwave ovens in order to serve heat ordered dishes.
Furthermore
, I will appreciate if you can allocate a more considerable budget for serving
good
food to your employees. I believe that such initiative can strengthen their motivation and dedication for work.

Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to seeing
positive
feedback.

Yours
faithfully
. Selma
Kaci
.
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IELTS letter Your manager intend to closethe company 's cafetería. Write letter to him. Why doesn' t it work well? Give him the main lacks in the service. What do you suggest to keep it open

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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