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your local hospital jas a advertised for peopleto do unpaid work helping at tbe hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. write a letter to the hopspital. in your letter explain why you would like to do unpaid work at tbe hospital. say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do. give details of when you would be available for this work.

your local hospital jas a advertised for peopleto do unpaid work helping at tbe hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. write a letter to the hopspital. in your letter explain why you would like to do unpaid work at tbe hospital. say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do. give details of when you would be available for this work. LrLrG
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest for working at the hospital. I had watch your advertisement at television that you need people to work. I am graduated as a nursing although I am underboard I have the experience and skills when it comes to take care of ill patients. I can help assist nurses when it comes for taking the blood pressure, checking the temperature of the patients and giving tepid sponge bath. I want to make use of my spare time for helping the people in need. I love taking elderly as well as children. I am always available like 5 in the afternoon onwards. I am hoping for your response. Respectfully yours, Jill
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest for working at the hospital. I had
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watch
your advertisement at television that you need
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people
to work. I
am graduated
as a nursing although I am
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underboard
I have the experience and
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skills
when it
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comes
to take care of ill patients.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
can
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help
assist nurses when it
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comes
for taking the blood pressure, checking the temperature of the patients and giving tepid sponge bath.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
want to
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make
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use
of my spare time for helping the
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people
in need.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
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love
taking elderly
as well
as children.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am always available like 5 in the afternoon onwards.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am hoping for your response.
Respectfully
yours,
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Jill

IELTS letter your local hospital jas a advertised for peopleto do unpaid work helping at tbe hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. write a letter to the hopspital. in your letter explain why you would like to do unpaid work at tbe hospital. say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do. give details of when you would be available for this work.

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119 words
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