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Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter, explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital. Say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do. Give some details of when you would be available for this work.

Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter, explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital. Say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do. Give some details of when you would be available for this work. EJYx
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing you with regard to your published advertisement about required volunteer works to assist you at your hospital. Hereby I would like to share my interest. I study social work at the University of Liverpool. My main focus in my degree is to interact with people in different conditions. So that is why I would like to participate in your volunteer works to get closer to the patients in order to understand their needs and also to understand how to serve them better. Since I have a couple of lessons about senior people in this semester at the university, I keen on helping you daily care of these people. Basically, I can chat with seniors and make sure that they feel more comfortable and not alone at the hospital environment. Moreover, I can be with them while they are having lunch. For instant, I can distribute their lunchs. Besides that, I can read them books that they would love to listen. As I mentioned above, I am a full time student during the week. That is why I am able to assist you at the weekends. I would prefer afternoons, if it is suitable for you too. I look forward to hearing from you and hope to start working at your hospital soon. Yours faithfully, Jon Conor
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing you with regard to your published advertisement about required volunteer works to assist you at your hospital. Hereby I would like to share my interest.

I study social work at the University of Liverpool. My main
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "focus".
focus in
my degree is to interact with
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people
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
conditions.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
that is
why I would like to participate in your volunteer works to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
closer to the patients in order to understand their needs and
also
to understand how to serve them better.

Since I have a couple of lessons about senior
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in this semester at the university, I keen on helping you daily care of these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
Basically
, I can chat with seniors and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that they feel more comfortable and not alone at the hospital environment.
Moreover
, I can be with them while they are having lunch. For instant, I can distribute their
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "lunches", the plural form of the noun 'lunch'?
lunchs
.
Besides
that, I can read them books that they would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to listen.

As I mentioned above, I am a full time student during the week.
That is
why I am able to assist you at the weekends. I would prefer afternoons, if it is suitable for you too.

I look forward to hearing from you and hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
working at your hospital
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
, Jon Conor
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IELTS letter Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter, explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital. Say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do. Give some details of when you would be available for this work.

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  American English
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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