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Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead

Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead gdlg
Dear Bill Gates, I am writing this letter in regards to the decision made by the area council to replace the sole city park for car parking. In my opinion, it will put a bad impact on society and the people who work there. I am Jayant, Citizen of the town where you plans to build a new parking place by entirely removing the existing park. I live in this town for the last 10 years and always supported the government's idea to develop the town. Moreover, I am a member city health and fitness club. The idea to demolish the town park for some extra space to park the vehicles is not a good move in the light of the fact that kids have no place to play outdoor games apart from the ground. Consequently, Children will start spending most of their time at home playing video games and chatting on social websites. Additionally, old people would not go for a walk which will affect their health and mental condition, and staying at home all day can lead to depression. I think the council should make underground parking which will resolve the parking issues without harming the local people's health and freedom. Thank you so much for your time and consideration. Yours truly, Jayant
Dear Bill Gates,

I am writing this letter
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in regards to
the decision made by the area council to replace the sole city
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park
for car
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parking
. In my opinion, it will put a
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bad
impact on society and the
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people
who work there.

I am
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Jayant
, Citizen of the
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town
where you
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plans
to build a new
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parking
place by
entirely
removing the existing
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park
. I
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live
in this
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town
for the last 10 years and always supported the
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government
's
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idea
to develop the
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town
.
Moreover
, I am a member city health and fitness club.

The
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idea
to demolish the
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town
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park
for
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some
extra space to
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park
the vehicles is not a
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good
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move
in the light of the fact that kids have no place to play outdoor games apart from the ground.
Consequently
, Children will
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start
spending most of their time at home playing video games and chatting on social websites.
Additionally
,
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old
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people
would not go for a walk which will affect their health and mental condition, and staying at home all day can lead to depression.

I
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think
the council should
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make
underground
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parking
which will resolve the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
issues without harming the local
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people
's health and freedom.

Thank you
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so
much for your time and consideration.

Yours
truly
,

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Jayant

IELTS letter Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead

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