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You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend

You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend gd9a
Dear Manik, After a long time I am writing you a letter, hope you are fine and everyone at your place are good too. I know you will be also worried about me as we haven’t talked for long but now here I am. Actually, I was so excited to tell you about many things, but firstly about the most recent event. Like yesterday I went to books exhibition (Type of exhibition). There were many of many books; there were different types of novels, fictions, fantasy world stories etc. I started going through with their names and a little bit of idea; you also know how much I like these types of exhibitions. I loved the poetry books there were many books of my favorite writers especially Manik. I still remember those school/college time days when we sit together in break time and instead of doing lunch we use to read some exciting books. I missed you so much I just hope that we will recall those memories together again soon. I brought some books for you too. So this was what I wanted to share with you and there is a lot more for that you’ll have to come soon. My all good wishes are with you. Regards, Manik
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Manik
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too. I know you will be
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now
here I am.

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so
excited to
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tell
you about
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many
things,
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but
firstly
about the most recent
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event
. Like
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yesterday I
went to
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books
exhibition (Type of exhibition). There were
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many
of
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many
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books
; there were
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different
types of novels, fictions, fantasy world stories etc. I
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started
going through with their names and a
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little bit
of
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idea
; you
also
know how much I like these types of exhibitions. I
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loved
the poetry
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books
there were
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many
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books
of my favorite writers
especially
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Manik
.

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I
still
remember those school/college time days when we sit together in break time and
instead
of doing lunch we
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use to
read
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some
exciting
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books
.
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I
missed you
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so
much I
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just
hope that we will recall those memories together again
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soon
.
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I
brought
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some
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books
for you too.

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So
this was what I wanted to share with you and there is a lot more for that you’ll
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have to
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come
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soon
.

My all
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good
wishes are with you.

Regards,

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Manik

IELTS letter You recently went to a public event (for example an exhibition, festival, or show) that you think your friend would enjoy. Write a letter to friend

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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