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Your friend thinks that mobile phones have made your lives much better. Do you agree with his/her statement? Write a letter to your friend in which you:

Your friend thinks that mobile phones have made your lives much better. Write a letter to your friend in which you: 0E633
Dear Sabina, How is everything going? I hope you are in hogh spirits. It was great to get your letter in which you wrote me about mobile phones which have made our lives easier. I think that it's quite fascinating topic to talk about! Of course, I totally agree with you. Undoubtedly, mobile phones have revolutionized the way we communicate. Firstly, with them we can communicate with people all over the world, no matter where we are. We can also text, play games, listen to music, set an alarm clock and so on. In addition to this we are able to use the Internet and connect with the whole world by Mobile. Can you imagine, I still remember when I got my first cell phone. It was around 10 years ago. My parents purchased the latest model of Nokia cell phone, Nokia N8, for my birthday. I was very overjoyed to get that phone as it was a very popular model of that time. It had all the latest features, a 12-megapixel camera, a 3. 5-inch AMOLED display with 16 gigabytse of mass memory. Finally, I would like to tell you one funny story which has happened recently. Once I was in a hurry and wanted to take my charger with me, because I did not want my brother to use my charger. He often takes my charger. And I don't like it. When I left, my brother went into the room and saw that I had forgotten my phone on the table. After I had come back, my brother asked me if I had charged my phone. We both burst out laughing. Write me if some amusing story has ever happened with you and your phone. I hope to hear from you soon. Best wishes, Tori
Dear Sabina,

How is everything going? I hope you are in
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hogh
spirits. It was great to
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get
your letter in which you wrote me about mobile
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phones
which have made our
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lives
easier. I
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think
that it's quite fascinating topic to talk about!

Of course
, I
totally
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agree
with you.
Undoubtedly
, mobile
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phones
have revolutionized the way we communicate.
Firstly
, with them we can communicate with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
all over the world, no matter where we are. We can
also
text, play games, listen to music, set an alarm clock and
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so
on.
In addition
to this we are able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the Internet and connect with the whole world by Mobile.

Can you imagine, I
still
remember when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
my
first
cell
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
. It was around 10 years ago. My parents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
the latest model of Nokia cell
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phone
, Nokia N8, for my birthday. I was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
overjoyed to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
as it was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
popular model of that time. It had all the latest features, a 12-megapixel camera, a 3. 5-inch AMOLED display with 16
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gigabytse
of mass memory.

Finally
, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you one
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
funny
story which has happened recently. Once I was in a hurry and wanted to take my charger with me,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I did not want my brother to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
my charger. He
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
takes my charger. And I don't like it. When I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
, my brother went into the room and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
that I had forgotten my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
on the table. After I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back, my brother asked me if I had charged my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
. We both burst out laughing.

Write me if
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some
amusing story has ever happened
The verb 'happen' usually requires the preposition "to".
with
you and your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
. I hope to hear from you
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soon
.

Best wishes,

Tori
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IELTS letter Your friend thinks that mobile phones have made your lives much better. Write a letter to your friend in which you:

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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