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Your friend Kim is on your flat during your vacations

Your friend Kim is on your flat during your vacations VbAm
Dear Kim: Don't say thanks. It's great to know that you are taking care of my flat so an intruder doesn't break into. Firstly, the keys are hidden behind the first pot of flowers on your left hand. Also, I should tell you that there are some rules in my flat. The first rule is about noises, don't turn on the music too loud because it can annoy my neighbors. The second rule is about my closet, if you want to use something I wish you let me know. The last rule is the cleaness of my flat, you know I hate to see everything dirty. Finally, you can buy food in the market that is down the street. It's super cheap and has so much options for all types of dietarian restrictions. I will expect to see you when I come back. Love and kisses, Bea.
Dear Kim:

Don't say thanks. It's great to know that you are taking care of my flat
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
an intruder doesn't break into.

Firstly
, the keys
are hidden
behind the
first
pot of flowers on your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
hand.

Also
, I should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rules
in my flat. The
first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rule
is about noises, don't turn on the music too loud
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it can annoy my neighbors. The second
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rule
is about my closet, if you want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
something I wish you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
last
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rule
is the
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cleaness
of my flat, you know I hate to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
everything dirty.
Finally
, you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
food in the market
that is
down the street. It's super
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
and has
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so
Use "many" with countable nouns.
much
options for all types of
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dietarian
restrictions.

I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
back.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Love
and kisses,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Bea
.

IELTS letter Your friend Kim is on your flat during your vacations

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
147 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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