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Your former boss has contacted you to offer you a position to help him start his new company. Write a letter to your former boss. In your letter: • Thank him for the job offering • Decline his job offer and explain why. • Show your appreciation and wish him well on his new project.

Your former boss has contacted you to offer you a position to help him start his new company. Write a letter to your former boss. In your letter: • Thank him for the job offering • Decline his job offer and explain why. • Show your appreciation and wish him well on his new project. GWaLB
I am writing this letter with reference to the job oppotunity offered by you in your new company as a system engineer. First of all, I am very thankful to you for considering me for this post. It is overwhelming that I posses the qualities which you are looking to start your brand new firm. However I am not in a position to make any decision right now. Therefore, I cannot accept the job offer due to my personal reasons. My wife and I have worked hard to settle here and buying a new house at new province will costs us an arm and a leg. I do not want to abandon my family for my dream job. Nevertheless, your job proposal is astonishing and I believe I can keep up the position here one day. I wish you a good luck with your new possibilities and challenges. Again, my heartfelt apologies for turning down your job offer. Hope you understand. Yours faithfully, MD Rafeeq.
I am writing this letter with reference to the
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job
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oppotunity
offered by you in your
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new
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company
as a system engineer.

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First of all
, I am
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very
thankful to you for considering me for this post. It is overwhelming that
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I posses
the qualities which you are looking to
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start
your brand
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new
firm.
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However
I am not in a position to
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make
any decision right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.

Therefore
, I cannot accept the
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job
offer due to my personal reasons. My wife and I have worked
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hard
to settle here and buying a
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new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
at
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new
province will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "cost"
costs
us an arm and a leg. I do not want to abandon my family for my dream job.

Nevertheless
, your
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job
proposal is astonishing and I believe I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
up the position here one day. I wish you a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
luck with your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
possibilities and challenges. Again, my heartfelt apologies for turning down your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
offer. Hope you understand.

Yours
faithfully
,

MD
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Rafeeq
.

IELTS letter Your former boss has contacted you to offer you a position to help him start his new company. Write a letter to your former boss. In your letter: • Thank him for the job offering • Decline his job offer and explain why. • Show your appreciation and wish him well on his new project.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
165 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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