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Could you give me advice? I want to travel around your country for a month. Where should I go? What should I see?

Could you give me advice? I want to travel around your country for a month. Where should I go? What should I see? ne7De
Dear Nhi, How are you these days? I am very happy to receive your letter. I heard that you want to travel to Vietnam for a month. I'd be happy to give you some advice. Perhaps you are wondering where to go for this vacation. I know a few very interesting places and I'll show you. If you come to Vietnam, you can try going to Hanoi, which is an ancient city and also the capital of Vietnam. There is Ba Dinh Square, where Ho Chi Minh's mausoleum is located. You should also go to Old Quarter Shopping, which is the busiest trading place. The Temple of Literature and West Lake are also people's favorite photo spots. If you like the new and bustling, you should go to Ho Chi Minh City. It is impossible not to mention Landmark 81, which is considered an ideal tourist destination in Saigon. Or if you are looking for a day trip to Saigon associated with the culture and history of the nation, the Independence Palace will be a great suggestion for you. I showed you a picture of Hoi An old town before and you said you liked it, so I think you should go there if you come to Vietnam. Hoi An is known across Vietnam for being a hub for beautiful locally made products and you will be able to shop for these in places like the main central market. . . That's my personal opinion, hope it's useful to you, have a nice trip. Show me the pictures you took during your trip. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Sincerely, Tram
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How are you these days? I am
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happy to receive your letter. I heard that you want to travel to Vietnam for a month.
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'd be happy to give you
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advice.

Perhaps you are wondering where to go for this vacation. I know a few
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very
interesting places and I'll
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you. If you
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come
to Vietnam, you can try going to Hanoi, which is an ancient city and
also
the capital of Vietnam. There is Ba
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Dinh
Square, where Ho Chi Minh's mausoleum
is located
. You should
also
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Quarter Shopping, which is the busiest trading place. The Temple of Literature and West Lake are
also
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people
's favorite photo spots. If you like the new and bustling, you should go to Ho Chi Minh City. It is impossible not to mention Landmark 81, which
is considered
an ideal tourist destination in Saigon. Or if you are looking for a day trip to Saigon associated with the culture and history of the nation, the Independence Palace will be a great suggestion for you. I
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An
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you should go there if you
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to Vietnam.
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Hoi
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across Vietnam for being a hub for
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beautiful
locally
made products and you will be able to shop for these in places like the main central market.
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That's my personal opinion, hope it's useful to you, have a nice trip.
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Show
me the pictures you took during your trip. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely
,

Tram

IELTS letter Could you give me advice? I want to travel around your country for a month. Where should I go? What should I see?

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