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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

Dear Madam, I am Riffat Shahee and I am writing this letter in connection with my interest to get admission for my son in your reputable school. I am going to move from Karachi to Lahore in March 2021, as my hospital (Ziauddin Hopital) has opened a new branch at link road that is why they have transferred me with my family for the next 4 years. My Son “Yshan” is very intelligent and very active in class as he is also a Class CR. Although he is 8 years old he has passed grade 5 with a 97% mark in his class. He always takes full marks in mathematics and he has participated in the school's competition for basketball on the regional level and he got winner position. I saw the profile of your school and I am really amazed by the quality and pattern of education which has maintained by your school. I really wish that my son could get enrolled for grade 6 in your prestigious school so he can continue his education without having any gape. I hope that you will feel proud of him. I shall be very thankful and waiting for your positive response. Yours sincerely, Mrs. Farrukh
Dear Madam, I am
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Riffat
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Shahee and
I am writing this letter in connection with my interest to
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get
admission for my son in your reputable
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school
. I am going to
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move
from Karachi to Lahore in March 2021, as my hospital (
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Ziauddin
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Hopital
) has opened a new branch at link road
that is
why they have transferred me with my family for the
next
4 years. My Son “
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Yshan
” is
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very
intelligent and
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very
active in
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class
as he is
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Class
CR.
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Although
he is 8 years
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old
he has passed grade 5 with a 97% mark in his
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class
. He always takes full marks in
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mathematics and
he has participated in the school's competition for basketball on the regional
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level and
he
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got
winner position. I
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saw
the profile of your
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school and
I am
really
amazed by the quality and pattern of education which has maintained by your
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school
. I
really
wish that my son could
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get
enrolled for grade 6 in your prestigious
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school
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so
he can continue his education without having any gape.
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I
hope that you will feel proud of him.
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I
shall be
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very
thankful and waiting for your
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positive
response. Yours
sincerely
, Mrs.
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Farrukh
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IELTS letter Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

Letter
  American English
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203 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.0
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