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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to seek admission for my son to study at your school. I, with my family are moving to Brampton next month and would like to enroll my 10 year old son at your prestigious insititution. My son, Nilan has finished his third grade in "Bosco Public School" and I am looking forward to admit him in your school to brighten his future. On his academic front, Nilan used to attain top 3 ranks in all of his quarterly exams. Also, he was awarded as the best student for last academic year inorder to recognize his work towards multiple science projects and competitions. Nilan is having a strong passion towards robotics and science projects and I strongly believe your school will shapen his educational career and take him to the next level. I would like you to consider my request and enroll my son for fourth grade at school. so that his future will be in safe hands. Can you please confirm if seats are available enough to accept my son. Hope my request will be taken into consideration. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Siva Narayanaraj
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to seek admission for my
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son
to study at your school.

I, with my family are moving to Brampton
next
month and would like to enroll my 10 year
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son
at your prestigious
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insititution
. My
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son
,
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Nilan
has finished his third grade in
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Bosco Public School
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and I am looking forward
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to admit
him in your
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school
to brighten his future.

On his academic front,
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Nilan
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used
to attain top 3 ranks in all of his quarterly exams.
Also
, he
was awarded
as the best student for last academic year
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inorder
to recognize his work towards multiple science projects and competitions.
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Nilan
is having a strong passion towards robotics and science projects and I
strongly
believe your
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school
will
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shapen
his educational career and take him to the
next
level.

I would like you to consider my request and enroll my
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son
for fourth grade at
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school
.
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so
that his future will be in safe hands. Can you
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please
confirm if seats are available
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enough
to accept my son.

Hope my request will
be taken
into consideration. Looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Siva
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Narayanaraj
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IELTS letter Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
197 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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