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Please Evaluate....need guidance...!!! You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the training course you want to do • explain what the company could do to help you • say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir, This letter is in regards to the Import and Export Course that I would like go for and would want it to be sponsored by our company, as it will give a bounce to my cognitive skills and would also give an edge to my professional arena. In pursuit of the same, I would feel ecstatic if the organisation funds me with the imperative time and pecuniary resources to help me accelerate my professional skills. To let you know in detail, the course is a one month training program, where focus will be to provide an incumbent with both theoretical and practical knowledge. The course will cover topics from Import and Export Policies, International Business and Finance Implications on Trade, How to attain international market through digital media and many other similar topics. Furthermore, on completion of the course all the participants will be awarded with a Certificate of Completion. It would be a feather in my hat, if I will be given an opportunity to complete this course. Looking forward to hear for your swift and prompt reply. Yours Sincerely Tanu Arora
Dear Sir,

This letter is
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
the Import and Export
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Course
that I would like go for and would want it to
be sponsored
by our
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company
, as it will give a bounce to my cognitive
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skills
and would
also
give an edge to my professional arena.

In pursuit of the same, I would feel ecstatic if the
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organisation
funds me with the imperative time and pecuniary resources to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me accelerate my professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know in detail, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
is a
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "one-month"
one month
training program, where focus will be to provide an incumbent with both theoretical and practical knowledge. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
will cover topics from Import and Export Policies, International Business and Finance Implications on Trade, How to attain international market through digital media and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
other similar topics.
Furthermore
, on completion of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
all the participants will
be awarded
with a Certificate of Completion.

It would be a feather in my hat, if I will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
an opportunity to complete this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. Looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
for your swift and prompt reply.

Yours
Sincerely


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Tanu
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IELTS letter Please Evaluate. . . . need guidance. . . ! ! ! You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the training course you want to do • explain what the company could do to help you • say how the course will be useful for your job

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  American English
7 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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