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Your employer wants you to attend a training course in computer skill next month but for personal reasons you are not able to do this.

dear sir Walter I'm John. I hope you're doing great. I'm write letter for you about attend this training course for improved computer skill at the next month. I know this craft is very important in workplace and also very useful for us. About this issue I have little problem. As you know in the next month I will get married and I have to ready for that. in hance, I'm very busy at that time. even I want from you, if possible in the next month get to leave work for one week. I have two suggest for you first of all we can attend in training course during this month. another offer we can attend in training courses after my ceremony. I promise in the near future we can develop in company. I hope accepted my apologize about this issue. thank you. your sincerely John
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.
dear
sir Walter I'm John. I hope you're doing great. I'm
Consider using either the past participle “written” or the present participle “writing” here.
write
letter for you about attend this training course for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
computer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
at the
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
know this craft is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
in workplace and
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
useful for us. About this issue I have
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little
problem. As you know in the
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
married and
I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
ready for that.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.
in
Possible spelling mistake found.
hance
, I'm
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
busy at that time.
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even
I want from you, if possible in the
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
work for one week. I have
The expression ‘two suggest’ seems incorrect in this context.
two suggest
for you
Often, this adverbial phrase is redundant. Consider using “first”.
first of all
we can attend in training course during this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.
another
offer we can attend in training courses after my ceremony. I promise in the near future we can develop in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. I hope
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
my
The word “apologize” is a noun. Did you mean “apology”?
apologize
about this issue.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.
thank
you.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.
your
sincerely
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph.
John

IELTS letter Your employer wants you to attend a training course in computer skill next month but for personal reasons you are not able to do this.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
146 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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