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Your child is going on a trip to another country for 3 days. School is looking for some parents who can join the trip and you decided to apply for the same. You are interested in going with trip. Write a letter to the head of the school and include: Why you want to join the team What you can do to assist Queries related to the trip.

Your child is going on a trip to another country for 3 days. School is looking for some parents who can join the trip and you decided to apply for the same. You are interested in going with trip. Write a letter to the head of the school and include: Why you want to join the team What you can do to assist Queries related to the trip. VRq7
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my interest in accompanying my son on the 3-day trip to Australia. I have been planning a trip to Australia with my son for a long time, but due to my busy schedule we could not make it yet. However, I will be available next month. So it will be a great opportunity for me to enjoy the holiday with my son. I used to work in Australia for three years. Therefore, I think I can share some information about making arrangements for accommodation and food. Besides, I am a doctor, so I will provide medical assistance in case of emergencies. I would be really grateful if you could advise me what sort of things are expected to bring for the trip. And, is there any free time during the 3 days? I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Tom Smith
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in accompanying my son on the 3-day trip to Australia.

I have been planning a trip to Australia with my son for a long time,
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but
due to my busy schedule we could not
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make
it
yet
.
However
, I will be available
next
month.
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So
it will be a great opportunity for me to enjoy the holiday with my son.

I
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used
to work in Australia for three years.
Therefore
, I
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think
I can share
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some
information about making arrangements for accommodation and food.
Besides
, I am a doctor,
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so
I will provide medical assistance in case of emergencies.

I would be
really
grateful if you could advise me what sort of things
Possible agreement error. Did you mean "is"? (Some collective nouns can be treated as both singular and plural, so 'are' is not always incorrect.)
are
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expected
to bring for the trip. And, is there any free time during the 3 days?

I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Tom Smith
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IELTS letter Your child is going on a trip to another country for 3 days. School is looking for some parents who can join the trip and you decided to apply for the same. You are interested in going with trip. Write a letter to the head of the school and include: Why you want to join the team What you can do to assist Queries related to the trip.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
152 words
7.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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