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You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter the singer. In you letter 1. say how you feel about his performance 2. give details of your musical activities 3. explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter the singer. In you letter 1. say how you feel about his performance 2. give details of your musical activities 3. explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities 5Don
Dear Sid, I am writing to you regarding your magical performance in the "Music for LIFE" concert that took place last week. I have been a huge fan of your singing and you were exceptional the other day. It was such a soothing and soulful experience all together. The way you sang the number "The other night" still resonates in my ears. Not only did your voice do some magic but it also almost gave me happy tears. I was uber lucky to have gotten the seats and to be there. You gave me one of the most unforgettable days of my being. I would like to tell you a little about my journey in the musical field. I have been learning Carnatic music since I could remember to breathe. Numerous leading singers in the industry have tutelaged me before. However, I would like to venture into "Live music. " I was hoping to take some lessons from you if you were willing to teach me. It would be an honour to be one of your students and learn from the very best. I look forward to hearing a positive response from you soon. Best, Aishwarya
Dear Sid,

I am writing to you regarding your magical performance in the
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Music for LIFE
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concert that took place last week.

I have been a huge fan of your singing and you were exceptional the other day. It was such a soothing and soulful experience all together. The way you sang the number
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"
The other night
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"
still
resonates in my ears. Not
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only
did your voice do
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some
magic
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but
it
also
almost gave me happy tears. I was
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uber
lucky to have gotten the seats and to be there. You gave me one of the most unforgettable days of my being.

I would like to
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tell
you a
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little
about my journey in the musical field. I have been learning
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Carnatic
music since I could remember to breathe. Numerous leading singers in the industry have
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tutelaged
me
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before
.

However
, I would like to venture into
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"
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Live
music.
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"
I was hoping to take
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some
lessons from you if you were willing to teach me. It would be an
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honour
to be one of your students and learn from the
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very
best.

I look forward to hearing a
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positive
response from you
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soon
.

Best,

Aishwarya

IELTS letter You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter the singer. In you letter 1. say how you feel about his performance 2. give details of your musical activities 3. explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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