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You borrowed a book from a public library and the book is now damaged. v.3

You borrowed a book from a public library and the book is now damaged. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, Two weeks ago I borrowed a book from your library. I was excited to have read the book but very disappointed to recently find that it was damaged. I am hoping you will allow me to purchase a new book of the same title as compensation. In relation to the specifics of the book, I borrowed 'Nineteen Eighty-Four' a novel by George Orwell, on 17th July from your library using my library card BM-450124. I have been thoroughly enjoying the book and almost finished it until it got damaged. Unfortunately, On 25th July, three days before the due date to return the novel, I found that it was ruined due to the pouring rain that somehow reached my table placed near the window. I put the book on the table and had been outside the whole time it rained. All of the books on the table absorbed rainwater and the book I borrowed from the library is now unreadable due to the damage the water caused to it. As a solution, and because I really want to express my apology for the incident, I seek your permission to purchase a new book with the same title for the library. I am also hoping that you would not impose any penalty for the incident. Thank you in advance and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours faithfully, Erica Jong
Dear Sir or Madam,

Two weeks ago I borrowed a
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book
from your library. I
was excited
to have read the
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book
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but
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very
disappointed to recently find that it
was damaged
. I am hoping you will
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allow
me to
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purchase
a new
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book
of the same title as compensation.

In relation to the specifics of the
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book
, I borrowed 'Nineteen Eighty-Four' a novel by George Orwell, on 17th July from your library using my library card BM-450124. I have been
thoroughly
enjoying the
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book
and almost finished it until it
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got
damaged.

Unfortunately, On 25th July, three days
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before
the due date to return the novel, I found that it
was ruined
due to the pouring rain that somehow reached my table placed near the window. I put the
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book
on the table and had been outside the whole time it rained.
Consider using "all the".
All of the
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books
on the table absorbed rainwater and the
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book
I borrowed from the library is
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now
unreadable due to the damage the water caused to it.

As a solution, and
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because
I
really
want to express my apology for the incident, I seek your permission to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
with the same title for the library. I am
also
hoping that you would not impose any penalty for the incident.

Thank you in advance and I hope to hear your reply
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Erica
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS letter You borrowed a book from a public library and the book is now damaged. v. 3

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  American English
8 paragraphs
232 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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