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You would like to work overseas, write a leyter to employment agency

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Dear Madam, Perhaps in the abroad has a lots of managing position for people who has ability to manage. Mely name is Alina Grenger. I am Uzbek, currenty working in a hotel with 3 stars as manager. It is my intention to work in overseas for three year. I am writing to you about possiblity of managing in abroad for the coming year. I have been graduated university and I have IELTS 8. 5 and CEFR C2 sertificates also I am really self confident and get on well with poeple not only these I have got skills to manage people and during the reading I am going to study Masters degree and in mear future I will work in a hotel which has 5 stars. I would certainly be interestee in hearing from you and wish to have an appointment for an meeting. For your convinience I enclose my resume. I look forward to hearing from you and wish you a happy Eid. Regards, Alina Grener
Dear Madam, Perhaps in the abroad has
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a lots
of managing position for
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people
who
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has
ability to manage.
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Mely
name is Alina
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Grenger
. I am Uzbek,
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currenty
working in a hotel with 3 stars as manager. It is my intention to work in overseas for three year. I am writing to you about
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possiblity
of managing in abroad for the coming year. I have been
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graduated
university and I have IELTS 8. 5 and CEFR C2
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sertificates
also
I am
really
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self confident
and
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get
on well with
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poeple
not
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only
these I have
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skills
to manage
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people
and during the reading I am going to study
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Masters
degree and in
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mear
future I will work in a hotel which has 5 stars. I would
certainly
be
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interestee
in hearing from you and wish to have an appointment for
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an
meeting. For your
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convinience
I enclose my resume. I look forward to hearing from you and wish you a happy
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Eid
. Regards, Alina
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Grener

IELTS letter You would like to work overseas, write a leyter to employment agency

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
165 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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