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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address.

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address. yepE
Daer Mr. Denzil, , I am writing to you in regards to the Tech Seminar that is going to be held in near furture by our company in germany. As i am into sales and lokking after sales operation globally, i would like to attend this seminar. I would like to request you to provide me with further details on this seminar, when it is going to be held, list of programs etc. I would also request the company to provide me with Visa for germany. i have further queries, like for accomodation, whether company will bear the hotel expenses or employee has to pay for it, food expenses will be reimbursed or not, Two way ticket will be provided by the company or not, conveyance will be provided or not. Would appreciate your prompt response in this as Visa process will take 25-30 days and my passport is expiring next month so i have to get it renewed first which will take 1 week. Best regards Ankita
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Daer
Mr.
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Denzil
,
Two consecutive commas
,


I am writing to you
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
the Tech Seminar
that is
going to
be held
in near
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furture
by our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
in
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germany
. As
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
am into sales and
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lokking
after sales operation globally,
Did you mean "I"?
i
would like to attend this seminar. I would like to request you to provide me with
further
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
on this seminar, when it is going to
be held
, list of programs etc.

I would
also
request the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
to provide me with Visa for
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germany
.
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have
further
queries, like for
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accomodation
, whether
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
will bear the hotel expenses or employee
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
has to
pay for it, food expenses will
be reimbursed
or not, Two way
Possible agreement error. The noun 'ticket' seems to be countable, so consider using: "tickets".
ticket
will
be provided
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
or not, conveyance will
be provided
or not.

Would appreciate your prompt response in this as Visa process will take 25-30 days and my passport is expiring
next
month
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
it renewed
first
which will take 1 week.

Best regards

Ankita

IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. You do NOT need to write any address.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
167 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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