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you would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country

you would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country rPM2

Dear sir, Madam Hoping this email finds you well. I am Mohammed, a civil engineer and have been working with international committee of the red cross (ICRC) for four years. I heard from some colleagues about the seminar that you plan to hold it soon. In fact, ICRC support and encourage the employees to attend different courses and seminars to build capacity for the staff and eventually, improve their skills which should be reflect to improve the employees' performance. To get this chance, ICRC request deep details about the seminar and the information that you mentioned in the advertisement is not enough to proceed my request. hereunto, the details that I need to finalize my request: Firstly, the program's details which mention the topics which will discuss during the seminar plus the schedule date, total fees. in addition, I have to know the accommodation, if it's already included with total fees or I need to find another agent to take this part? and if there is any recommended agent from your side to facilitate my request. for your information, all these details should be embedded in one email and hence I will forward it to my line manager for final approval. last but not the least, you have to expect a call from my employee to confirm these information and to respond for any other inquiries. thanks in advanced sincerely Mohammed Janabi

Dear sir, Madam

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