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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express my great interest in participating in the "2021 Finance update" seminar held in Tianjin, China. I would like to learn more detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation, and cost. I am informed that the seminar will be held in Tianjin in April and it will last for 1 week. Please kindly inform us about the dates that the seminar will be held. Please also includes a detailed schedule for the seminar, such as what time it starts or ends. Moreover, please let my team know about the content that will be covered by the seminar, so we can come prepared by doing prior researches on the topics. Please also inform us about the accommodations you can potentially provide, so we can plan ahead. It will be much appreciated if you can arrange for 5 people in 3 rooms. Please email us about the estimated cost for the whole trip including the flight ticket and accommodations. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Annabel
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my great interest
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in participating in
the
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"
2021 Finance update
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"
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
held in Tianjin, China. I would like to learn more detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation, and cost.

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I
am informed
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
will
be held
in Tianjin in April and it will last for 1 week.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Please
kindly inform us about the dates that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
will
be held
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Please
also
includes a detailed schedule for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
, such as what time it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
or ends.

Moreover
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
my team know about the content that will
be covered
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
prepared by doing prior researches on the topics.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
also
inform us about the accommodations you can
potentially
provide,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we can plan ahead. It will be much appreciated if you can arrange for 5
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in 3 rooms.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Please
email us about the estimated cost for the whole trip including the flight ticket and accommodations.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Annabel
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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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