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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. nB8n
Dear sir/madam, I hope this letter finds you well, I was informed about the seminar in Japan and I will like to participate because it’s related to my work here in UAE. I was told it will hold on the 27th or 28th of October. I just want to be properly informed on the correct day and time. I will also appreciate if you send me detailed information on the program as well. I hear it always meet up to expectations. I have a budget and will like to know the cost of everything which includes feeding, accommodation and transportation. I will be glad if you send me all the requirements so as to plan for this seminar. I hope to hear from you soon. Regards, Bisola
Dear sir/madam, I hope this letter finds you well, I
was informed
about the seminar in Japan and I
Did you mean "would"?
will
like to participate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it’s related to my work here
A determiner is probably missing here: "in the UAE".
in UAE
. I was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
it will hold on the 27th or 28th of October. I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
want to be
properly
informed on the correct day and time.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will
also
appreciate if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me detailed information on the program
as well
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hear it always
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
up to expectations.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have a budget and will like to know the cost of everything which includes feeding, accommodation and transportation.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will be glad if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me all the requirements
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
plan for this seminar.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. Regards,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Bisola
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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
126 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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