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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter. Explain why you would like the job. Give details oif why you would be a suitable person to employ. Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter. Explain why you would like the job. Give details oif why you would be a suitable person to employ. Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia. qg7P
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Taylor, My name is Manpreet. I have been living in India since my birth. last sunday i have gone through the Australian magazine where I read an advert that you and your family seeking someone who could take care your six year old child while staying there. I have been many countries and I am known to dinstinct cultures and traditions. I really want to put my foot in Australia as I listen a lot about this country. Before this, I have been working as a care taker of children of different ages that is from three to eight years old. I have done six month Nanny diploma, first aid diploma as well. I really love to spend time with toddlers. Even they also have a interest to enjoy their time with me. During my stay whenever I get spare time it would be an opportunity for me to learn English and visit tourist places also. Thank you for getting time to read my letter. Please feel free to contact me for more information or details. My contact number is 94881444315. With regards, Manpreet kaur.
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Taylor,

My name is
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Manpreet
. I have been living in India since my birth.
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last
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sunday
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i
have gone through the Australian magazine where I read an advert that you and your family seeking someone who could take care your six year
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old
child while staying there. I have been
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many
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countries and
I
am known
to
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dinstinct
cultures and traditions. I
really
want to put my foot in Australia as I listen a lot about this country.

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Before
this, I have been working as a care taker of children of
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different
ages
that is
from three to eight years
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old
. I have done six month Nanny
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diploma
,
first
aid diploma
as well
. I
really
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love
to spend
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time
with toddlers. Even they
also
have
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a
interest to enjoy their
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time
with me.

During my stay whenever I
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get
spare
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time
it would be an opportunity for me to learn English and visit tourist places
also
.

Thank you for getting
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time
to read my letter.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
feel free to contact me for more information or
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details
. My contact number is 94881444315.

With regards,
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Manpreet
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kaur
.
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter. Explain why you would like the job. Give details oif why you would be a suitable person to employ. Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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