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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. N0lb
Dear Sir or Madam, I heard about the prospective session on workplace efficiency to be conducted by your company in March in Dubai and would like to join the same. To complete my booking, I would require you to provide me with the complete information regarding the exact schedule, the topics included as well as the detailed itinerary. It would be helpful if you can provide me with options to stay in Dubai as I will be travelling to the city I have not visited earlier. Being new to the place, I am clueless regarding the hotels over there. Lastly, please also provide the complete cost of the program along with information on how to make the payment. In the interest of clarity, it will be much appreciated if I can have the breakup of all the charges and the tax applicable if any. I hope the meeting will be productive in changing my habits to become more efficient. Kindly forward me the required details before this month-end for me to complete my booking process. Yours faithfully, Adam Sandler
Dear Sir or Madam,

I heard about the prospective session on workplace efficiency to
be conducted
by your
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company
in March in Dubai and would like to
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join
the same.

To
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
complete
my booking, I would require you to provide me with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
complete
information regarding the exact schedule, the topics included
as well
as the detailed itinerary. It would be helpful if you can provide me with options to stay in Dubai as I will be travelling to the city I have not visited earlier. Being new to the place, I am clueless regarding the hotels over there.
Lastly
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
also
provide the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
complete
cost of the program along with information on how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the payment. In the interest of clarity, it will be much appreciated if I can have the breakup of all the charges and the tax applicable if any.

I hope the meeting will be productive in changing my habits to become more efficient. Kindly forward me the required
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
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before
this month-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
for me to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
complete
my booking process.

Yours
faithfully
,

Adam Sandler

IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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