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you bought a music concert ticket. However,you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend.Write a letter to your friend say-about the concert , say why you are unable to go and inform how your fiend can receive the ticket.

you bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to your friend say-about the concert, say why you are unable to go and inform how your fiend can receive the ticket. xr5b
Dear Rohan, Hope you are doing good. I want to let you know one of the big concerts which will take place in Sydney campus next Tuesday on 28th of July. It is being organised after two years. In addition to this, one of the best singers from all over the world is about to perform there. Furthermore, we will have an opportunity to meet with him a t the end of the concert. I bought the ticket in advance but unfortunately, i am not able to go at that moment. The problem is that, i got a phone call yesterday from my home town that my father got a heart attack, so i have to go there. I am the only son who has to look after the business and other responsibilities. Moreover, my father has been advised for complete bed rest for next two months. Thus, i want to offer my ticket to you so that you can enjoy the concert. I will send you a link and following that link you can receive the ticket. I hope you will enjoy it. Take care and stay fine. Yours lovingly, Neelam
Dear Rohan, Hope you are doing
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concerts which will take place in Sydney campus
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Tuesday on 28th of July. It is being
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organised
after two years.
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to this, one of the best singers from all over the world is about to perform there.
Furthermore
, we will have an opportunity to
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meet
with him a t the
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end
of the concert. I
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bought
the ticket in advance
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but
unfortunately,
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i
am not able to go at that moment. The problem is that,
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i
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got
a phone call yesterday from my home town that my father
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got
a heart attack,
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so
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i
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have to
go there. I am the
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only
son who
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has to
look after the business and other responsibilities.
Moreover
, my father has
been advised
for complete bed rest for
next
two months.
Thus
,
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i
want to offer my ticket to you
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so
that you can enjoy the concert. I will
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send
you a link and following that link you can receive the ticket. I hope you will enjoy it. Take care and stay fine. Yours
lovingly
,
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Neelam

IELTS letter you bought a music concert ticket. However, you are unable to go. So you want to offer the ticket to your friend. Write a letter to your friend say-about the concert, say why you are unable to go and inform how your fiend can receive the ticket.

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