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Reporting a lost item to the manager of the railway

Reporting a lost item to the manager of the railway gK17
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to report about a lost item. It looks that while I was inside the metro I had left my shopping bag. Last Thursday on 4th of March I took the train from Rashidia to Jafiliya metro station at 12 noon seated in the single chair exactly at the right side allocated in the women and children aisle I had the shopping bags with me and I placed it underneath but unfortunately I was in a hurry and I must have forgotten it on the train. It was a large with a white back ground shopping bag and had the logo of Dyson company with the photo of hair styler Fushia color. Inside the huge bag there are other boxes the first box is the largest and black in color it contains the Airwrap hair styler and the other four small boxes holds the extension parts of device. As you can imagine these valuable items are extremely important. Kindly let me know if you have my shopping bag and how I can get it back. Write to me a on a return address or email. Thank you for your consideration Nuha
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to report about a lost item. It looks that while I was inside the metro I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
. Last Thursday on 4th of March I took the train from
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Rashidia
to
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Jafiliya
metro station at 12 noon seated in the single chair exactly
The usual prepositions to use when in contact with the side is "on" not "in". Did you mean "on the right side"?
at the right side
allocated in the women and children aisle I had the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
with me and I placed it underneath
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but
unfortunately I was in a hurry and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
have forgotten it on the train. It was a large with a white back ground
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
and had the logo of Dyson
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
with the photo of hair styler
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Fushia
color. Inside the huge
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bag
there are other boxes the
first
box is the largest and black in color it contains the
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Airwrap
hair styler and the other four
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small
boxes holds the extension parts of device.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
you can imagine these valuable items are
extremely
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important
. Kindly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if you have my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
and how I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
it back. Write to me
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
on a return address or email.

Thank you for your consideration

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Nuha

IELTS letter Reporting a lost item to the manager of the railway

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
196 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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