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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. BXra
Hello Sir, My name is Dev Parmar I am working in marketing deparment in Sigma corporation. I heard that our company planing seminar in Canada regarding marketing techniques. I would like to particiapte in that program. First of all I would like more information about seminar. which date this seminar is? if this is in next week it wold be great for me. Secondly what is the itenary of this seminar also where it going to orgonize. I am sure it in indoor area I heard that Canada have coolest weather as compare to other countrys. Last but not least what is the arregment for the accomodation for participant and how much it would be per person. I wonder if I can stay at my uncle's place during this seminar it will be great for me. Also I like to learn and expore other companys marketing technique and apply on our products. This is a biggest oppurtinity at my job. Your truely, Dev Parmar
Hello Sir,

My name is Dev
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Parmar
I am working in marketing
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deparment
in Sigma corporation. I heard that our
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company
planing
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seminar
in Canada regarding marketing techniques. I would like to
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particiapte
in that program.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
I would like more information about
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seminar
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
which
date this
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seminar
is?
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if
this is in
next
week
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it wold
be great for me.
Secondly
what is the
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itenary
of this
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seminar
also
where
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it going
to
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orgonize
. I am sure it in indoor area I heard that Canada have
A determiner is probably missing here: "the coolest".
coolest
weather as compare to other
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countrys
.

Last
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but
not least what is the
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arregment
for the
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accomodation
for participant and how much it would be per person. I wonder if I can stay at my uncle's place during this
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seminar
it will be great for me.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
I like to learn and
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expore
other
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companys
marketing technique and apply on our products. This is
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a
biggest
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oppurtinity
at my job.

Your
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truely
,

Dev
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Parmar
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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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