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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost. 2blRj
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter with regards to seminar which is happening in abroad and i want to participate on that. For me the seminar is important because it's related to my day to day work and it will tell how we could do theings in a better way. As this seminar is planned in different nation, I am requesting you to please help me to capture more and more information about this seminar, so that I could plan my journey, accomodation well without any surprises. Please provide me details aboout program like - when the exactly program is? What about accomodation and what cost? Is cost included both accomodation and program or we have to manage accomodation. As early as I get all these deatils, it will be easy for me to prepare. As this program is very crucial for me, I want to attend it without any problem. I hope it will be easy to you to provide details asap. Yours faithfully Robert Smith
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter
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with regards to
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seminar
which is happening in abroad and
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i
want to participate on that.

For me the
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seminar
is
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important
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because
it's related to my
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day to day
work and it will
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tell
how we could do
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theings
in a better way.

As this
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seminar
is planned
in
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different
nation, I am requesting you to
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please
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help
me to capture more and more information about this
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seminar
,
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so
that I could plan my journey,
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accomodation
well without any surprises.
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Please
provide me
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details
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aboout
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program
like
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when the exactly
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program
is? What about
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accomodation
and what cost?
Is cost
included both
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accomodation
and
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program or
we
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have to
manage
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accomodation
. As early as I
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get
all these
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deatils
, it will be easy for me to prepare. As this
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program
is
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very
crucial for me, I want to attend it without any problem.

I hope it will be easy to you to provide
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details
asap.

Yours
faithfully


Robert Smith

IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
167 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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