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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you. qGgP
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this to let you know that I am not happy with my current living conditions. There are no problems with the accommodation as such; however, it is getting very difficult to live with my current roommate. I want to justify my stay here by performing extremely well in my upcoming project assignments. Let me explain my situation. I am a student of physics, my work requires full concentration and focus while solving complex problems. My current roommate however is very noisy and stays up all night, playing loud music. Despite multiple friendly requests, he is consistent with this behavior. Moreover, few of his friends stay with him overnight on mostly all alternate days. I am sure this is a possible breach of hostel etiquette and contract as well. Would you kindly transfer him or me to a new room? I am a very quiet and disciplined person and would prefer to stay with a roommate of similar habits. If this request will incur any extra fee, I would request you to waive that for me as my situation and reasons are genuine. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Jay
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this to
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let
you know that I am not happy with my
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current
living conditions. There are no problems with the accommodation as such;
however
, it is getting
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very
difficult to
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live
with my
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current
roommate. I want to justify my
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stay
here by performing
extremely
well in my upcoming project assignments.

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Let
me
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explain
my situation. I am a student of physics, my work requires full concentration and focus while solving complex problems. My
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current
roommate
however
is
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very
noisy and
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stays
up all night, playing loud music. Despite multiple friendly requests, he is consistent with this behavior.
Moreover
, few of his friends
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
with him overnight on
mostly
all alternate days. I am sure this is a possible breach of hostel etiquette and contract
as well
.

Would you kindly transfer him or me to a new room? I am a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
quiet and disciplined person and would prefer to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
stay
with a roommate of similar habits. If this request
Consider removing 'will'. (Usually, 'will' does not occur in a conditional clause, unless in the sense 'want to' or 'be willing to'.)
will incur
any extra fee, I would request you to waive that for me as my situation and reasons are genuine.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jay
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IELTS letter You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
196 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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