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You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: • say how you feel about his/her performance • give details of your music-related activities • explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: • say how you feel about his/her performance • give details of your music-related activities • explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities 3pdJ
Dear Arijit, My name is Rinkal Makasana. I am college student as well as huge fan of your singing. I am writing this letter to congratulate you for a wonderful performance at Karnawati Club, Ahmedabad yesterday evening. The show was fantastic and breathtaking for every one who attending live. My friend and me join it. Moreover, your voice is so pleasing and melodious to the ears. I don’t forget your heroic performance last evening. I am keen lover for music thus learn from my childhood. Currently I have join music band and I do performe only weekends because of my study. I have participated musical compitition which is more benefitial for my career. You have always been my idol as a songster and songwriter. I am sure you are terribly busy, I am really hoping that you would share some tips and guidence about voice controlling techniques. To addition, I want to saw you some work and play CD of my song. Please give me some feedback also. Thank you very much for giving unforgettable night. I look forward to receiving your positive and prompt response. Yours Sincerely, Rinkal Makasana
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Arijit
,

My name is
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Rinkal
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Makasana
. I am college student
as well
as huge fan of your singing. I am writing this letter to congratulate you for a wonderful performance at
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Karnawati
Club, Ahmedabad yesterday evening.

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show
was fantastic and breathtaking for every one who attending
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live
. My friend and
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me
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join
it.
Moreover
, your voice is
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so
pleasing and melodious to the ears. I don’t forget your heroic performance last evening.

I am keen lover for music
thus
learn from my childhood.
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Currently
I have
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join
music band and I do
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performe
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only
weekends
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because
of my study. I have participated musical
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compitition
which is more
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benefitial
for my career. You have always been my idol as a songster and songwriter.

I am sure you are
terribly
busy, I am
really
hoping that you would share
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some
tips and
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guidence
about voice controlling techniques.
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addition, I want to
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saw
you
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some
work and play CD of my song.
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Please
give me
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some
feedback
also
.

Thank you
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very
much for giving unforgettable night. I look forward to receiving your
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positive
and prompt response.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Rinkal
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Makasana

IELTS letter You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: • say how you feel about his/her performance • give details of your music-related activities • explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities

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