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You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Dear Sir, My name is Sam resident at Hill Wood flat no 15, I would like to purchase a microwave oven made by Sony and a DVD Player to gift my friends birthday. I am considering the Sony model Tx253 black colored one and the DVD player model RF258, please confirm with your inventory department is it available or not, if it is not available please order it and I can get it next Saturday evening Regarding the above-mentioned item, required an estimated price notification because my expected budget is around 1500 US dollars for the microwave oven and 600 US dollars for the DVD player. In your notification, would you please remember to include the maximum holding duration, so I will collect it on the weekend. You can call me on 9547858502 for further clarification. Looking forward to hearing from you soon Yours Faithfully Sam
Dear Sir,

My name is Sam resident at Hill Wood flat no 15, I would like to
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purchase
a microwave oven made by Sony and a DVD Player to gift my friends birthday. I am considering the Sony model Tx253 black colored one and the DVD player model RF258,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
confirm with your inventory department is it available or not, if it is not available
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please
order it and I can
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get
it
next
Saturday
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph.
evening


Regarding the above-mentioned item, required an estimated price notification
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because
my
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expected
budget is around 1500 US dollars for the microwave oven and 600 US dollars for the DVD player. In your notification, would you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
remember to include the maximum holding duration,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I will collect it on the weekend. You can call me on 9547858502 for
further
clarification.

Looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon


Yours
Faithfully
Sam

IELTS letter You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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