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Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter * explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital * say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do * give details of when you would be available for this work

Dear Sir, In response to a recent advertisement broadcast on television, I am writing to express my interest in the unpaid job at your hospital. I really appreciate the management for the opportunity to do a volunteer job at the medical center. My mum is a Nurse and she devotes her professional life to serving people and society as a whole. I am highly inspired by her and I am keen to do the same for people who need medical care. I have no specialty related to medicine, but I can make myself useful in the cards and record section as well as offering guidance to patients and visitors who are not used to the hospital. I will be available to work at your hospital on weekends as I am engaged with other activities on weekdays. I will be grateful if my request is granted as a volunteer worker. Yours faithfully, Nkechi Igwe
Dear Sir,

In response to a recent advertisement broadcast on television, I am writing to express my interest in the unpaid job at your hospital. I
really
appreciate the management for the opportunity to do a volunteer job at the medical center.

My mum is a
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Nurse and
she devotes her professional life to serving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and society as a whole. I am
highly
inspired by
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
her and
I am keen to do the same for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who need medical care.

I have no specialty related to medicine,
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but
I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
myself useful in the cards and record section
as well
as offering guidance to patients and visitors who are not
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used
to the hospital.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will be available to work at your hospital on weekends as I
am engaged
with other activities on weekdays.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will be grateful if my request
is granted
as a volunteer worker.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Nkechi
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Igwe

IELTS letter Your local hospital has advertised for people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital. You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time. Write a letter to the hospital. In your letter * explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital * say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do * give details of when you would be available for this work

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