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You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter • give details of the camera and where you bought it • explain what has happened • say what you want him/her to do about it

You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter • give details of the camera and where you bought it • explain what has happened • say what you want him/her to do about it 2Oro
Dear sir/madam, I am writing this letter regarding to help me problem about a camera I bought from your company. I bought this camera from Toronto Eaton center on February 25 on my last trip from Toronto to Winnipeg. When I bought this camera, I was not able to check it because I was getting late to take my flight. After reached at Winnipeg, I open camera box and there was not charger with it. There is empty space for the charger. The camera model is canon DSLR 700 and the cost of camera is $899. Now I can not get back to Toronto because of COVID restrictions. I request you to if you can send the missing part of the camera to my address. I attached the copy of receipt and my address information. You are the company representative and I hope it would be helpful to writing a letter to you regarding this problem. I would be thankful to you. Yours faithfully Kamaljit
Dear sir/madam,

I am writing this letter
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. I
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camera
from Toronto Eaton center on February 25 on my last trip from Toronto to Winnipeg.

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bought
this
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camera
, I was not able to
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check
it
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because
I was getting late to take my flight. After reached at Winnipeg, I open
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camera
box and there was not charger with it. There is empty space for the charger. The
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camera
model is canon DSLR 700 and the cost of
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camera
is $899.

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Now
I can not
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get
back to Toronto
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because
of
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COVID
restrictions. I request you to if you can
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send
the missing part of the
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camera
to my address. I attached the copy of receipt and my address information. You are the
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company
representative and I hope it would be helpful to writing a letter to you regarding this problem. I would be thankful to you.

Yours
faithfully


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Kamaljit

IELTS letter You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter • give details of the camera and where you bought it • explain what has happened • say what you want him/her to do about it

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164 words
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