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You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: explain why you need this time off - give details of when you want this time off - say who can do your work when you are away –

You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: explain why you need this time off - give details of when you want this time off - say who can do your work when you are away – pd6w
Dear Mr Paul, I am writing this letter to request a two - day unpaid leave. Unfortunately, my uncle had a car accident and in dire need of a blood donor. Since I am the nearest blood relative to him. It is necessary for me to visit and save his life. I would have to fly out as soon as possible, as his health is getter worse with every passing minute. Additionally, I have planned to leave today, and a return flight reservation has been made for Sunday morning. In this way, I will be away from work starting on January 18th and will resume back on the 21st of January. Since Mr Jack has been closely working along with me on the client’s presentation, which is scheduled for coming Thursday. I have internally discussed this with him, and he is willing to support me in this difficult time. Furthermore, I will be available for any assistance required at any time. Please consider this emergency I am facing at the moment and allow me to have these two days off. Yours sincerely, Khurram Khan
Dear Mr Paul,

I am writing this letter to request a two
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-
day unpaid
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
. Unfortunately, my uncle had a car accident and in dire need of a blood donor.
“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
I am the nearest blood relative to him. It is necessary for me to visit and save his life.

I would
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
fly
out as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible, as his health is getter worse with every passing minute.
Additionally
, I have planned to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
, and a return flight reservation has
been made
for Sunday morning. In this way, I will be away from work starting on January 18th and will resume back on the 21st of January.

Since Mr Jack has been
closely
working along with me on the client’s presentation, which
is scheduled
for coming Thursday. I have
internally
discussed this with him, and he is willing to support me in this difficult time.
Furthermore
, I will be available for any assistance required at any time.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
consider this emergency I am facing at the moment and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to have these two days off.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Khurram
Khan

IELTS letter You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: explain why you need this time off - give details of when you want this time off - say who can do your work when you are away –

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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