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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect

You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect RryY
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Simu Shah and I am living in Delhi. I just read your article which is printed on international travel magazine. That article contains some example about my city. It mentioned on the article that Delhi has world best Puma branded clothing shop which is situated in Drama city centre shop number is 231 but in actual it is 213. Shop number 231 is the plumbing shop not the clothing shop. There is one letter mistake between 1 and 3. I know about these two shops because I am living just few metres away from these shops. I want you to fix this issue and let everyone know about the exact shop number because it will cause so many problems for the customers who wants to do shopping on that shop due to the wrong information and wrong address of the shop. Thanks and have a nice day Yours Sincerely, Simu Shah
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is
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I am living in Delhi. I
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example about my city.

It mentioned on the article that Delhi has world best Puma branded clothing
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shop
which
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in Drama city
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centre
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number is 231
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in actual it is 213.
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number 231 is the plumbing
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not the clothing
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. There is one letter mistake between 1 and 3. I know about these two
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shops
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because
I am living
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few
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away from these shops.

I want you to
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fix
this issue and
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let
everyone know about the exact
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shop
number
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because
it will cause
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problems for the customers who
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wants
to
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on that
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due to the
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wrong
information and
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wrong
address of the
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shop
. Thanks and have a nice day

Yours
Sincerely
,
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Simu
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Shah

IELTS letter You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect

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  American English
3 paragraphs
157 words
5.0
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