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You work in a busy but poorly organized office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department.

You work in a busy but poorly organized office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department. eBQK

Dear Mr. Smith, I joined this company five years ago and while I am satisfied with my current position of administrative assistant I feel that I am ready to perform the more challenging role. That's why I would like to apply for the position of office supervisor. As you know I have qualifications in management and I have more than 10 years of experience in this area. In addition, I frequently take different courses for advanced training such as team leadership and others. During this time here I have been responsible for computer software and I am aware that most of the computer's systems are outdated and are inadequate to deal with a huge number of customers. If you give me the opportunity to manage this area I would plan to upgrade all systems. I feel that my experience of work with our customers makes me well suited for this position. With my talent and experience, I believe I will benefit this department and contribute to our organization's success. Thank you for your time and consideration! Yours Faithfully, Marina Babilia

Dear Mr. Smith,

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joined
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company
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 with my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :contemporarymodern
current
 position of administrative assistant I feel that I am ready to perform the more challenging role. That's why I would like to apply for the position of office supervisor.

As you know I have qualifications in management and I have more than 10 years of experience in this area. In addition
, I frequently
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different
 courses for advanced training such as team leadership This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:and many more
and others
. During this time here I have been responsible for computer Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).software, and
software and
 I am aware that most of the computer's systems are outdated
 and are inadequate to deal with a huge number of customers. “If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
 you give me the opportunity to manage this area I would plan to upgrade all systems.

I feel that my experience of work with our customers This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createsconstructsmanufacturesproduces
makes
 me well suited for this position. With my talent and experience, I believe I will benefit this department and contribute to our organization's success.

Thank you for your time and consideration!

Yours Faithfully
,

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Babilia