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You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter • give details of the camera and where you bought it • explain what has happened • say what you want him/her to do about it

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter in reference to the camera which I bought from one of your stores. My friend recommended me to get a camera from your company since you sell the best cameras. Unfortunately, the package is missing some essential parts. On January 10, 2021, I bought a black colored Cannon 360 HD model camera with a grey strap to hand around the neck. The retailer told me that it came with two spare batteries. Since it was out of stock in most of your stores, I had to travel all the way to Norman Street which is a one-hour drive from my house to purchase this camera. I received the camera in a sealed box therefore, I did not think of un-boxing it to check if it contained all its parts. It was not until I had arrived at my hotel, I was shocked to see that the batteries were missing from the package. I am extremely disappointed, as I was looking forward to taking pictures for my blog. You are requested to kindly look into the matter and take the required action along with a refund. Yours sincerely, Ifrah.
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter in reference to the
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camera
which I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
from one of your stores. My friend recommended me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a
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camera
from your
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company
since you sell the best
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cameras
. Unfortunately, the package is missing
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some
essential parts.

On January 10, 2021, I
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bought
a black colored Cannon 360 HD model
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camera
with a
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grey
strap to hand around the neck. The retailer
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told
me that it came with two spare batteries. Since it was out of stock in most of your stores, I had to travel all the way to Norman Street which is a one-hour drive from my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
to
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purchase
this camera.

I received the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
camera
in a sealed box
therefore
, I did not
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think
of
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un-boxing
it to
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check
if it contained all its parts. It was not until I had arrived at my hotel, I
was shocked
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
that the batteries were missing from the package.

I am
extremely
disappointed, as I was looking forward to taking pictures for my blog. You
are requested
to kindly look into the matter and take the required action along with a refund.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Ifrah
.

IELTS letter You recently bought a camera while travelling overseas. When you got to your destination you discovered that some important items were missing from the box. Write a letter to the local representative of the company. In your letter • give details of the camera and where you bought it • explain what has happened • say what you want him/her to do about it

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  American English
7 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
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