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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it, *You should write at least 150 words*

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it, ** en9J
Dear Mrs Johnson, I am writing to request to be moved to our head office in South Africa for the period of six months following the training of supervisors to commence April. I would love to partake in the training to gain more knowledge on the job and also be opportuned to meet with other colleagues from other branches at my level. I understand my job is of great importance to the company, therefore I am willing to work online from South Africa and respond to all mails while away for the training I would appreciate your assistance and approval towards my intended training programme. Thank you in anticipation of your favourable response Yours sincerely, Mariam Alli
Dear Mrs Johnson,

I am writing to request to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
to our head office in South Africa for the period of six months following the training of supervisors to commence April.

I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to partake in the training to gain more knowledge on the job and
also
be
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opportuned
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
with other colleagues from other branches at my level.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
understand my job is of great importance to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
,
therefore
I am willing to work online from South Africa and respond to all mails while away for the training

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would appreciate your assistance and approval towards my intended training
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programme
.

Thank you in anticipation of your
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favourable
response

Yours
sincerely
,

Mariam
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Alli
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IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it, **

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
116 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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