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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it V1WQ
Dera Mr Smith, I am writing this letter to express my desire to work in our headquater in London for six month for further bussiness training. I am extermly deliteted I hear that our UK head office annouced a six month training seassion for five hundrard employees to reform thier working skills in marketing. I want waiting for this chance from last two years and now it has come. I believe if I get this training I will introduce myraid benefits to my company and also teach these skills to other employees in our branch. I had already consulted with my working peer Rahul and he agreed to take care of my project and assingments in my absence. After returing back to office i will do overtime and putt my all efforts to cafchup everything i missed in six month period. I want you to support me and allow me to work for six month in our head office in London. For my transfer to UK I need your constent and your signature of application. I will be very greatfull to you if you may do this favour to me. I look towards your positive response. Yours faithfully, Taranbir Singh.
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Dera
Mr Smith,

I am writing this letter to express my desire to work in our
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headquater
in London for six
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month
for
further
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bussiness
training.

I am
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extermly
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deliteted
I hear that our UK head office
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annouced
a six
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
training
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seassion
for five
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hundrard
employees to reform
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thier
working
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skills
in marketing.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
want waiting for this chance from last two years and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
it has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
believe if I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
this training I will introduce
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myraid
benefits to my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and
also
teach these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
to other employees in our branch.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
had already consulted with my working peer
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Rahul and
he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agreed
to take care of my project and
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assingments
in my absence. After
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returing
back to office
Did you mean "I"?
i
will do overtime and putt my all efforts to
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cafchup
everything
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
missed in six
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
period.

I want you to support me and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to work for six
Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: "months".
month
in our head office in London. For my transfer to UK I need your
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constent
and your signature of application. I will be
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very
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greatfull
to you if you may do this
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
to me.

I look towards your
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Taranbir
Singh.

IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
200 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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