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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months Say how your work could be done while you are away Ask for his/her help in arranging it

Dear Mr William, I am writing this letter to express my interest in working at our company headquarters located in the United States for a short period of time. As you are aware we have started developing the software for the Underground mining products at our offshore design centre. I would like to travel to our company headquarters and work there for a period of six months to acquire detailed knowledge about the product for which we develop software solutions. This is quite essential to build an effective software that meets customer expectations. During my absence, I would like my colleague Mr Adam to take over my work in supporting the software team as a product owner. I have already discussed the travel plans with him and made him aware of the responsibilities of the role, so we can continue with the software development during my absence. Finally, I would need your support to get the approvals for the travel plan which I feel would really help us to get the product developed with a 100% success rate. I look forward to a positive reply from you. Yours Sincerely, Name
Dear Mr William,

I am writing this letter to express my interest in working at our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
headquarters located in the United States for a short period of time.

As you are aware we have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
developing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
for the Underground mining
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
at our offshore design
Possible spelling mistake. ‘centre’ is British English.
centre
. I would like to travel to our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
headquarters and work there for a period of six months to acquire detailed knowledge about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
for which we develop
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
solutions. This is quite essential to build an effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
that meets customer expectations.

During my absence, I would like my colleague Mr Adam to take over my work in supporting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
team as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
owner. I have already discussed the travel plans with him and made him aware of the responsibilities of the role,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
we can continue with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
software
development during my absence.
Finally
, I would need your support to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the approvals for the travel plan which I feel would
really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
developed with a 100% success rate.

I look forward to a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
reply from you.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Name
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IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months Say how your work could be done while you are away Ask for his/her help in arranging it

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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