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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months Say how your work could be done while you are away Ask for his/her help in arranging it

Dear Mr George, I am writing to express my interest in working at our company headquarters in the United Kingdom for a few months to further enhance my skills and get exposure to the global market trends of our products so that I can better contribute to my company and carry out my responsibilities more efficiently. As you know, I have been recently promoted to the assistant product manager post and I am working hard to collaborate with my team to enhance the sales and increase our brand reputation. However, I have been feeling the need to meet and work with our global team members and attend some training sessions that our head office in London arranges frequently. I am quite positive that the opportunity to work in our company’s head office for six months will further enhance my knowledge and give me an exposure to the global market trend. I have talked to Julian and he has agreed to take up my responsibilities during my absence. Furthermore, I will check my emails daily, and be available for emergency phone calls. Once I get back to the office, I would endeavour to work extra hours in order to catch up on anything I had missed. Finally, I would need your support to get approval so that I can work in our company’s head office for six months and fulfil the objectives. I look forward to your positive reply. Yours sincerely, Charles Hugo Model Answer 2: Dear Mr Jacob, I am writing this letter to inform you about my desire to work in our company’s head office in Amsterdam for about six months. Recently, our company has announced an extensive training programme on the techniques of developing new accounting software for mid-size business firms, and I would like to avail this opportunity. Our company now develops such software for only small firms at our local office and soon we will need to target large business entities. The training programme is to be held at our head office from 10th of the next July. I would also like to add here that this particular training programme may prove out to be quite important for a software development team leader like me in showing the way to the junior team members and managing larger projects in the future. I have already talked to my project manager to help my team members carry on their routine works without any hurdle, and he assured me that he would jump in to fill the void within the team in my absence. So, it would be great if you could arrange for my transfer so that I can join the training programme and bring innovations to our team. Yours sincerely, John Andrew
Dear Mr George,

I am writing to express my interest in working at our
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company
headquarters in the United Kingdom for a few months to
further
enhance my
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skills
and
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get
exposure to the global market trends of our products
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so
that I can better contribute to my
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company
and carry out my responsibilities more
efficiently
.

As you know, I have been recently promoted to the assistant product manager post and I am working
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hard
to collaborate with my
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team
to enhance the sales and increase our brand reputation.
However
, I have been feeling the need to
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meet
and
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work
with our global
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team
members and attend
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some
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training
sessions that our head
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office
in London arranges
frequently
. I am quite
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positive
that the opportunity to
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work
in our
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company’s
head
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office
for six months will
further
enhance my knowledge and give me an exposure to the global market trend.

I have talked to
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Julian and
he has
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agreed
to take up my responsibilities during my absence.
Furthermore
, I will
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check
my emails daily, and be available for emergency phone calls. Once I
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get
back to the
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office
, I would
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endeavour
to
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work
extra hours in order to catch up on anything I had missed.

Finally
, I would need your support to
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get
approval
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so
that I can
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work
in our
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company’s
head
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office
for six months and fulfil the objectives.

I look forward to your
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positive
reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

Charles Hugo

Model Answer 2:

Dear Mr Jacob,

I am writing this letter to inform you about my desire to
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work
in our
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company’s
head
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office
in Amsterdam for about six months.

Recently, our
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company
has announced an extensive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
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programme
on the techniques of developing new accounting software for mid-size business firms, and I would like to avail this opportunity. Our
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company
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now
develops such software for
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only
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small
firms at our local
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office
and
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soon
we will need to target large business entities.

The
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training
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programme
is to
be held
at our head
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office
from 10th of the
next
July. I would
also
like to
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add
here that this particular
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training
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programme
may prove out to be quite
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important
for a software development
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team
leader like me in showing the way to the junior
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team
members and managing larger projects in the future.

I have already talked to my project manager to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
team
members carry on their routine works without any hurdle, and he assured me that he would jump in to fill the void within the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
team
in my absence.
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So
, it would be great if you could arrange for my transfer
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so
that I can
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join
the
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training
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programme
and bring innovations to our team.

Yours
sincerely
,

John Andrew
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IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months Say how your work could be done while you are away Ask for his/her help in arranging it

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  American English
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454 words
6.0
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