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You work for a large multinational company. There is a new position opening in your department. Write to the manager of your department and apply for that position. In the letter, Describe who you are and your current role Explain why you would like to apply for the new position Suggest what you want the manager to do

You work for a large multinational company. There is a new position opening in your department. Write to the manager of your department and apply for that position. In the letter, Describe who you are and your current role Explain why you would like to apply for the new position Suggest what you want the manager to do 362n
Dear Mr john, I'm writing this letter to get some information about recent job opening and how can I apply for a customer service department manager position in Walmart, Kelowna, British columbia. My name is Kirandeep Brar, and I am working as a customer service representative for two yeras in your store. I usually work eight hours shift daily from 2pm to 11pm. As you know, I am working really productive every day sice I started in this position and last year, I recognised as a shinning star of the month. However, I have all the qualifications you are looking for in the department manager position. Moreover, I wants to improve my communication and management skills so, I can open my company. I would like to suggest, if you can book my appointment with you on next weekend so, you can explain me more about my duties and set up first interview date for me. I assure you that I will never let you down. Thank you in advance for your considerations. I will look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Kiran Brar
Dear Mr john,

I'm writing this letter to
get
some
information about recent job opening and how can I apply for a customer service department manager position in Walmart,
Kelowna
,
British columbia
.

My name is
Kirandeep
Brar
, and I am working as a customer service representative for two
yeras
in your store. I
usually
work eight hours shift daily from 2pm to 11pm.

As you know, I am working
really
productive every
day sice
I
started
in this position and last year, I
recognised
as a shinning star of the month.
However
, I have all the qualifications you are looking for in the department manager position.
Moreover
, I
wants
to
improve
my communication and management
skills
so
, I can open my
company
.

I would like to suggest, if you can book my appointment with you on
next
weekend
so
, you can
explain
me more about my duties and set up
first
interview date for me.

I assure you that I will never
let
you down. Thank you in advance for your considerations. I will look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
, Kiran
Brar
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IELTS letter You work for a large multinational company. There is a new position opening in your department. Write to the manager of your department and apply for that position. In the letter, Describe who you are and your current role Explain why you would like to apply for the new position Suggest what you want the manager to do

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  American English
7 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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