Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You work for a company you have seen some information online about a training course that be useful for your work write a letter to the manager

You work for a company you have seen some information online about a training course that be useful for your work write a letter to the manager 0nMXB
Dear sir, I am writing to you to inform about an online training course which would be very useful for our work. I have seen it recently in the internet and I decided to write to you about it because it gives some opportunities for our students. To begin with, we both know that studying abroad is many students 'dream and this course will absolutely to achieve this goal. The course will begin in a few weeks and it is held online. It is about advantages of international education as well as methods of teaching foreign languages. Furthermore, it gives some chance to contract with educational centers whose teachers have some qualifications, after pass the exams. Hopefully you agree and give some help me with some issues such as in a financial way and working hours. I hope you agree this option.
Dear sir, I am writing to you to inform about an online training course which would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
useful for our work. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
it recently
The usual collocation for technology is "on," not "in." It is better to say this: "on the internet".
in the internet
and I decided to write to you about it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it gives
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
opportunities for our students. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, we both know that studying abroad is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
students 'dream and this course will
absolutely
to achieve this goal. The course will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
in a few weeks and it
is held
online. It is about advantages of international education
as well
as methods of teaching foreign languages.
Furthermore
, it gives
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
chance to contract with educational centers whose teachers have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
qualifications, after pass the exams.
Hopefully
you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
and give
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
issues such as
Consider replacing "in a financial way" with the adverb for "financial"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a financial way
and working hours. I hope you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
this option.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS letter You work for a company you have seen some information online about a training course that be useful for your work write a letter to the manager

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
142 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5.5band
    Cover letter for a position of the Department Supervisor.
    Dear Mr, I'm a Department Manager with more than 8 years of experience in integrating procedures for high performance and providing training to up to 40 employees in a fast-developing company. It makes me an ideal candidate for the position of Department Supervisor. I consider this vacancy as an o...
  • 5.5band
    Application letter to the manager of huge supermarket.
    Dear Sir Jamil JonI saw the posting for the marketing intern role on my university's online job board and I am fascinated in this position. I am drawn to your company's mission of innovation and putting the customer first. After reading your mission I decided to work in your company and it will be h...
  • 5.5band
    Applacation letter to the manager of the huge company
    Dear Sir Jamil TonI saw the posting for the marketing intern role on my university's online job board, and I am fascinated in this position. I am drawn to your company's mission of innovation and putting the customer first. After reading your mission I decided to work in your company and it will be ...
  • 5.5band
    You have decided your current employment
    Dear Mr Jonson. I am writing to inform you about my leaving current workplace. I have been working there for two years and I have learned how to work with young minds consequently, I saw an advertisement about tutorial work in the local newspaper and I believe that this employment actually suitable ...
  • 6band
    holiday for 2 weeks. ask your friend to go with you, explain where and when you want to go, give details of the travel, dates, and cost involved. describe some of things you want to do.
    Dear John, I am writing to ask you to go out with me for 2 weeks on holiday in Paris. I can understand this lockdown makes everyone stuck at home. I think we really need a break. I always been want to visit Eiffel tower so I decided to stay nearby hotel. I will meet you on Airport at 9: 00 am. Th...
  • 5.5band
    You want to go camping for a week with a family
    Dear Sir or Madam, Subject: Request for information regarding Camp Site Hope you are doing great. I happen to learn from your Facebook page that you have an exciting offer for families who want to visit your camp site between 15th May to 30th May. We are a family of 3 including a toddler and we ...