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Application letter to the manager of huge supermarket.

Application letter to the manager of huge supermarket. Nmyyy
Dear Sir Jamil JonI saw the posting for the marketing intern role on my university's online job board and I am fascinated in this position. I am drawn to your company's mission of innovation and putting the customer first. After reading your mission I decided to work in your company and it will be honour for me. I am 35 years old man with 10 years occupation and in my final years of earning my bachelor's degree in marketing with a minor in communications, so I feel my educational experience has prepared me to work in a fast - poced marketing department like the one with in your company or organization. I have strong communication skills, which are vital to success in the marketing. I believe my innovative nature and strong skill set will help me succeed. I appreciate your time in reviewing this letter and hope to hear from you in regard to the next steps in the hiring process. If you have any questions or need any additional information, please don’t hesitate to contact me. SincerelyMrs Kamola
Dear Sir Jamil
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JonI
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the posting for the
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marketing
intern role on my university's online job
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board and
I
am fascinated
in this position. I
am drawn
to your
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company
's mission of innovation and putting the customer
first
. After reading your mission I decided to work in your
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company
and it will be
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honour
for me. I am 35 years
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old
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man
with 10 years occupation and in my final years of earning my bachelor's degree in
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marketing
with a minor in communications,
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so
I feel my educational experience has prepared me to work in a
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fast
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-
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poced
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marketing
department like the one with in your
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company
or organization. I have strong communication
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skills
, which are vital to success in the
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marketing
.
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I
believe my innovative nature and strong
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skill
set will
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help
me succeed.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
appreciate your time in reviewing this letter and hope to hear from you in regard to the
next
steps in the hiring process. If you have any questions or need any additional information,
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please
don’t hesitate to contact me.
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SincerelyMrs
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Kamola
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IELTS letter Application letter to the manager of huge supermarket.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
178 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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