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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job write a letter to the shop which supplied the equipment

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job write a letter to the shop which supplied the equipment N82qy

Dear sir, I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction about the laptop, which I purchased from your store two months ago, and it was a black coloured laptop by Dell brand. Last night, I was busy to prepared my presentation on it, on the contrary it suddenly stop working and totally unusable. Besides, it just show black color screen with few red dots. I'm working for multinational company, and I have to submit three projects before the ending of this month. Furthermore, my various essential data retain the laptop. From your side, I just to fix the problem promptly or change this laptop with the other new one; furthermore, transfer all the data on other one. Please pay attention to this matter as your earlier convenience. I look forward hearing from you. Faithfully yours, Maryam

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction about the laptop, which I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
purchased
 from your store two months ago, and it was a Make sure that the adjective 'black' is correct. Possibly, it should be an adverb (typically ~ly) that modifies 'coloured'. Possibly, it should be the first word in a compound adjective (hyphenated adjective). Possibly, it is correct.
black coloured
 laptop by Dell brand. Last night, I was busy to prepared my presentation on it, on the contrary
 it suddenly
Did you mean "stops"?stops
stop
 working and totally
 unusable. Besides
, it This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
Did you mean "shows"?shows
show
 black color screen with few red dots.

I'm working for multinational This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
, and I This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 submit three projects This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 the ending of this month. Furthermore
, my various essential data retain the laptop.

From your side, I This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :rectify
fix
 the problem promptly
 or This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 this laptop with the other new one; furthermore
, transfer all the data on other one. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
 pay attention to this matter as your earlier convenience. I look forward hearing from you.

Faithfully
 yours, Possible spelling mistake found.Mar yamMary amMariam
Maryam