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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job E3dqx
Dear Sir, I work as a Houman Resourse manager and I do all my work at home. Few months ago I needed to buy extra hard driver for arrange my all work files. I bought sony 1000GB hard driver from your store in O'connel street in May. I was really happy to use this hard driver until yesterday. Yesterday morning I started to use work files from hard driver but was reading so long and at least it stucked I tried turn on and off computer but still same and couldn't open the files. I was have many works should finish by yesterday. Also all of my meeting appointments files was in that hard driver but all cancelled because I couldn't see the time and places. Yesterday afternoon I called to your customer service but they explained that I have to wait 3 working days. I have many urgent metters in this hard driver so I couldn't wait to fix that so long. This hard driver have still a guarantee. I have request to fix this hard driver and recover all my files today! I believe you are good and well known company so I am waiting for your best and user friendly service as soon as possible. Thanks and regards
Dear Sir, I
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as a
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Houman
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Resourse
manager and I do all my
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work
at home. Few months ago I needed to
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buy
extra
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hard
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driver
for arrange my all
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work
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files
. I
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bought
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sony
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1000GB
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hard
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driver
from your store in O'
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connel
street in May. I was
really
happy to
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use
this
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hard
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driver
until yesterday. Yesterday morning I
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started
to
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use
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work
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from
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hard
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driver
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but
was reading
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long and at least
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it stucked
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still
same and couldn't open the
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files
. I was
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have
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works should finish by yesterday.
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Also
all of my meeting appointments
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files
was in that
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hard
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driver
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but
all cancelled
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because
I couldn't
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the time and places. Yesterday afternoon I called to your customer service
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but
they
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explained
that I
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wait 3 working days. I have
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urgent
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metters
in this
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driver
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so
I couldn't wait to
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fix
that
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long. This
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hard
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have
still
a guarantee. I have request to
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fix
this
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and recover all my
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files
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today
! I believe you are
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good
and well known
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company
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I am waiting for your best and
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user friendly
service as
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soon
as possible. Thanks and
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regards

IELTS letter You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job

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  American English
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210 words
5.0
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