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You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say – Why do you want to apply? – What are your future goals? – Why would it be beneficial for the company?

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to apply for the position of marketing supervisor. My name is Mikee Ortega. Currently working as a part time employee in your company. While passing by the hallway I saw your advertisement about a vancant job. By the way, the contract that I signed last September will end in 2nd week of March. Wayback in college I took up business administration major in marketing management. I am very interested to have this full time job because it can mold me as a good marketing person. Also, I would like to share my learnings and skills that my professors taught me. It will be a great support for my family who is facing a financial problem. This position will fit me for the knowledge I can give to my future workmates and firm. Attending many seminars and activities help me to differentiate the supply and demand of the economy. Giving an excellent customer service and working hard to achieve the goals of the company. I look forward to your response. Yours Faithfully, Mikee
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to apply for the position of marketing supervisor. My name is
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Mikee
Ortega.
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Currently
working as a
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part time
employee in your
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company
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passing by the hallway I
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saw
your advertisement about a
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vancant
job. By the way, the contract that I signed last September will
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end
in 2nd week of March.

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Wayback
in college I took up business administration major in marketing management. I am
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very
interested to have this full time job
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it can mold me as a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
marketing person.
Also
, I would like to share my learnings and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
that my professors taught me. It will be a great support for my family who is facing a financial problem.

This position will fit me for the knowledge I can give to my future workmates and firm. Attending
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many
seminars and activities
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to differentiate the supply and demand of the economy. Giving an excellent customer service and working
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hard
to achieve the goals of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

I look forward to your response.

Yours
Faithfully
,

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Mikee

IELTS letter You work a part-time job in a company, and the company posted an advert seeking a person for a full-time position. Write a letter to your manager requesting to apply for the advertised position. In your letter say – Why do you want to apply? – What are your future goals? – Why would it be beneficial for the company?

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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