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You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation

You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation yypD

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to request you to arrange accommodation for me for a year. I have been transferred to London for a year and a suitable place for living is on my priority now before arriving to the country. A modern apartment with 2 bedrooms will be preferred and it should be near to the town. I am willing to make an agreement with the landlord about the rent and deposit. I can also pay some money as an advance if necessary. My arrival to the country is on March 12th. I can arrange furniture from my friend and no need to include that in the house rent. I have heard of your agency and I am pretty sure that you can deliver a fantastic service without fail. Please keep me posted about the progress. Yours Faithfully, Name

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to request you to arrange accommodation for me for a year. I have been transferred
 to London for a year and a suitable place for living is on my priority This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 arriving to the country. A modern apartment with 2 bedrooms will be preferred
 and it should be near to the town. I am willing to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 an agreement with the landlord about the rent and deposit. I can also
 pay This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 money as an advance if necessary. My The usual preposition for "the country" is "in" not "to." Try it like this:  "arrival in the country".arrival in the country
arrival to the country
 is on March 12th. I can arrange furniture from my friend and no need to include that in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 rent. I have heard of your Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).agency, and
agency and
 I am pretty sure that you can deliver a fantastic service without fail. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 me posted about the progress.

Yours Faithfully
, Name

IELTS letter You will go to a foreign country to stay there for one year, and you need a place to live in. You have decided to write to an agency for accommodation

Letter

American English

3 paragraphs

141 words

This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1

4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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